the (perfect essay writing) competition

[English boy]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة الفتى I'm so sorry for late this is my essay as u know, my umbilical cord was cutted in UK

are u in the UK.. Oh man if u r close to Essex plz tell me, I really need sth from there plz find me on FB (assem hossen)a I've got to ask u for a favor

[Conscientious]

Malak

try to avoid Run-on and fragment by using the proper punctuation between sentences

use the exact words and avoid the general ones like (better people = virtuous people )a

use also connectors between sentences like (for example, however ...etc)a

16

MS. Fabulous

the body shouldn't be in a form of paragragh actually the essay needs 2 pharagraghs at least . every one has its won main idea needs to be supprted by details

also be aware of parallelsim

13

Suzi

becareful of Run-on

prat of speech - use the adjectives , nouns, verbs in it's proper place like (determination = will- strong or determined also praying = prayer ) e

focus on ur thesis statement ! mention it in the intro , discuss it in the body and rewrite in a different way in the conclusion

be aware of using the propositions like (focus from = focus on )a

15

Ragad

be aware of fragment

don't use Coordinate Conjunctions( so , and , but...etc) at the beginning of the sentence but u can substitute them with the Subordinate Conjunctions ( Moreover - therefore - however ...etc )s

be aware of using (who- whom ) in its exact place

18


Note - if u are not convinced with anything of my correction please tell me i may mistake u wrongly


Good luck

[الفتى]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة English boy are u in the UK.. Oh man if u r close to Essex plz tell me, I really need sth from there plz find me on FB (assem hossen)a I've got to ask u for a favor

loooooool

I'm joking

[English boy]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة الفتى loooooool I'm joking

Ooh god hh man.. I was too excited lolu just want to show off huh .. there's an energy water(blue water) that I used to drink every single day back when I was studying at Essex.. I would buy a bottle even it might cost me a 100$ for each bottle, I don't care.. just want to have it for one more time.. couldn't find anywhere here in KSA

[Conscientious]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة English boy Ooh god hh man.. I was too excited lolu just want to show off huh .. there's an energy water(blue water) that I used to drink every single day back when I was studying at Essex.. I would buy a bottle even it might cost me a 100$ for each bottle, I don't care.. just want to have it for one more time.. couldn't find anywhere here in KSA

does that blue water really give u energy ?a

i'll buy it if this is true

i really need energy

[English boy]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Conscientious does that blue water really give u energy ?a i'll buy it if this is true i really need energy

the best water I ever had

it's just called Energy water .. so blue with very little gases .. daaam why there's no any here in KSA

[الملاك الأبيض]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة English boy the best water I ever had it's just called Energy water .. so blue with very little gases .. daaam why there's no any here in KSA

oooh god looks like u become addicted to it ,u should see a doctor because u r not gonna get any of this water in KSA hhh

[English boy]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة الملاك الأبيض oooh god looks like u become addicted to it ,u should see a doctor because u r not gonna get any of this water in KSA hhh

u may thought it contains alcohol.. O hell noo it's just a water.. and appearntly I seem yeaa very addicted