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[رويده عباس]

I write this thoughts yesterday

so please correct me


i was a girl with a long curls hear

with a big shiny smail

with soft happy dreams

i saw the beards flew and sing

i saw the sun glows as a golden ring

i was a happy girl

now""" hear i am

my tears never dry

my sorrow never die

lived in sadness and gloom

waiting the happenss to bloom

i was a girl

[عبير العسيري]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة رويده عباس I write this thoughts yesterday so please correct me i was a girl with a long curls hear with a big shiny smail with soft happy dreams i saw the beards flew and sing i saw the sun glows as a golden ring i was a happy girl now""" hear i am my tears never dry my sorrow never die lived in sadness and gloom waiting the happenss to bloom i was a girl

i like what wrote

it is so beautiful

and i encourage you to continue that




you have small mistakes

just in the dictation which may change all the meaning

and that well be sometimes very dangerous when you translate



i was a girl with a long curls hear =Hair

with a big shiny smail=smile

with soft happy dreams

i saw the beards=Birds flew and sing

i saw the sun glows as a golden ring

i was a happy girl

now""" hear=Here i am

my tears never dry

my sorrow never die

lived in sadness and gloom

waiting the happenss to bloom

i was a girl

[delicate]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة رويده عباس I write this thoughts yesterday so please correct me i was a girl with a long curls hear I was a girl with long curled hair with a big shiny smail with a big shiny smile with soft happy dreams i saw the beards flew and sing I saw the flying and singing birds i saw the sun glows as a golden ring I saw the the glowing sun as a golden ring i was a happy girl now""" hear i am now here Iam my tears never dry my sorrow never die lived in sadness and gloom living in sadness and gloom waiting the happenss to bloom waiting for happiness to bloom i was a girl

what do you think?

[رويده عباس]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة delicate what do you think?

I think it's better

thanks a lot