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[ابو فهد*]

Hello every body I like this subject and I want to participate with you all because I see all of you are awesome Raghooooooodah you are always amazing and every time I leave the fourm and back I found you became better I love you girl Keep going Abu Fahad you are very good teacher I liked your correction You are sooooooooo good man Keep going Maloooookh you are very good and I love you very much you are helpful person Keep going Raghoooodah this is my correction I'm sorry because I will not participate again because I don't have internet I'm in my uncle's house Please Keeeeep going ~Malekat Al- Ahasys ~

welcome 1000000

You will add value by your sharing,because the book recognized by it's title
(only joke)

[ابو فهد*]

The first thing I would like to thank you all for the great efforts ,,, this topic search for it since the forum god bless Wellness wallah , if they found time to write my essay,, I wrote to correct me, but my kids don,t allow me to sit in front of computer to study, there are never other have requirements......

You're welcome & thank you so much Yasminat Al sham

where there's a will, there's a way

I hope your kids get a heavy sleeping till you write your essay and deliver it for correction, if you couldn't write it now, after examination end write your essay and we will correct it

This my suggestion, what about others

Best regards

[جبل طارق]

الخاتمة يجب ان تكون فيها نصائح واقتراحات ونصح الناس كافة عن وقف التدخين وايضا في الاماكن العامه

[Violetta]

مرحبا بنات,
رجاءاً شوفولي دا المقال عارفة انو في اشياء ناقصة بس ماني عارفة اش اكتب...

[الملاك الأبيض]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Violetta مرحبا بنات, رجاءاً شوفولي دا المقال عارفة انو في اشياء ناقصة بس ماني عارفة اش اكتب...

hi violeta

how r u ? allow me to share my comments about your essay

first of all you have a good compile of words Masha Allah and this is a good thing for writing .

second you r not suppose to abbreviate words like "ads"

another thing u should not put the introduction like this way
when we write an essay we suppose to put it as a whole portion divided into paragraphs , but still all together not like you did with your introduction.
something else i noticed that your paragraphs is very short nevertheless it has many information, yet they still so small and short ,and this is very clear in your conclusion.
you also didn't write a nice conclusion to end with strong emotion or quote u only wrote the reasons with out any result , you must to expand your conclusion into one that has a good result or solution or quote


thats all ,and please forgeve me if i bothered u in any way , yet we r here to be useful for each other and not to be flattering

regards to all of you and you will find other notes in the attachment . .

[ياسمينة الشام]

What is the most subject and possible come in the exam .. How do we know the most important of them...
thank u

[رغد محمد]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Violetta مرحبا بنات, رجاءاً شوفولي دا المقال عارفة انو في اشياء ناقصة بس ماني عارفة اش اكتب...

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~....Hiiiiii Violetta honey

...I didn't see you for a long time ago. I hope you are ok dear

This is my correction darling, and I want you know that your way to organize the essay is wrong dear. You don't have to write Intoduction, Body, or conclusin" We know that already. You have to write it like an essay, Ok ?? Another thing I want to tell which is your writing

~....Honey

Your writing and ideas are amaaaazing Masha'allh Tabark Allah, Really I not joking at all. You have a numbers of words and knowledge that I admir your writing

May Allah protect you and help you to achive what you are looking for

See ya dear



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المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة ياسمينة الشام What is the most subject and possible come in the exam .. How do we know the most important of them... thank u

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..Hiii dear

I don't know honey. I hope anyone else who have the knowledge to help you

Thanks for your visiting



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[ابو فهد*]

Dear Raghad

While this saying have some merit on surface

This sentence is quite lateral translation which is most common mistake

however when children spend more than four hours daily on television, then they would probably watch some bad inappropriate scenes such as violence, sex, or they might hear a bad use for language which they would apply it later as a part of their imitation of their loveable characters like Batman or Superman.

These thesis statements are little complicated, pleas see my correction

However, some children spend almost four hours daily watching TV, so they might watch some bad or inappropriate scenes, such as acts of violence, sexual photos, or hear a bad use of language. They would apply that later as a part of their behavior, they do that to imitate their loveable characters, like Batman and Superman

Violetta

You are welcome and our teachers will check your writing soon, plaese excuse me now because my Internet connection is very low, after tomorrow I will be in Jeddah and I will check it

Note: don't hesitate to ask me about anything, but after tomorrow, because my writing exam will be on Sat. 9/7/1432


Best regards

[Violetta]

Well, but my writing exam will be on Tues on 5/7

[ياسمينة الشام]

Anchallah my exam will be the second Wednesday , why you are different and maby my time is error??