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Businessmen use commercial advertising to attract the consumers.
They can distribute products via its.
The advertising is important to sell the products. (on one hand, beneficial its) . First, distrubtion the products to all shops . Second, attracting the consumers to coming.
Third, offering the positives and negatives of the products.
Finally, create the attractive atmosphere for appealing the customers.

In conclusion, necessary requirements are achieve through advertising commercial .
Or necessary achieving required a good commercial advertising
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