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قديم 23-07-2010, 10:19 PM   #357

Conscientious

من لي سواك يا ربي فيشفيني

الصورة الرمزية Conscientious

 
تاريخ التسجيل: Mar 2008
التخصص: English
نوع الدراسة: إنتظام
المستوى: متخرج
الجنس: أنثى
المشاركات: 1,807
افتراضي رد: A new idea for new students in English section

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة عيون عليا مشاهدة المشاركة
Ok, girls

Now, I will put my first deive essay, and I hope to be good.
We should write about that to practice our skills.



My First Lovely country



When I want to travel to outside I will not be confused to where I can go.


I will choose Italy directly because it is my first lovely country.


It is attracting all people to visits it; really it is an amazing country.


I cannot forget my trip to it before many years ago


It has the beautiful cities which consist of historic places.


First, I went to Rome, and I took several pictures ( i think the word photos is more suitable) beside


a famous Colosseum which has the beautiful Legends (i didn't understand this word )a
.


Then, I visited a great Verona which has the best love story in the world.


When I stood in (at) the window of Juliet I imagined myself is (as) a hero of the story.


Next, I went to the state of Tuscany. There was the world's strangest


tower. It is an italic Piza tower .There was I saw many people from


different country. They were touring inside it.


Finally, a (the ) beauty of Italy is increasing from city to another one. .


In fact , I cannot forget that a great country which


has advantages of the tourist country (i didn't understand this sentence , could u please explain it further , or say it in Arabic , so i can tell u what to say instead , ok)a.



I'm excited to know my mistakes.
My questions:
1)Is my writing is deive essay or not??
yes , i think so
2)I want to know your point of view in my
writing , and your advices
sooooooo wonderful MashaAllah .
Thanks a lot in advanced
correct me co. نقرتين لعرض الصورة في صفحة مستقلة

Good luck

any Q ask me plz

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة رغد محمد مشاهدة المشاركة
Good morning every body
Happy friday to everyone
today I am going to write my deive essay ,and I want your opinion OK

.................................

My First Visit to The center of Specail Needs

Commonly I heard that any person want to see the Specail Needs it( he ) must have a strong heart especailly when they were children .
When I was in (the) middle (intermediate) school I went to the Center of Specail Needs with my teachers ,and my friends.It was amazing and wonderful,but at the beginning I couldn’t enter to the center when I saw the (a) child (not more than five years of age (old) ) deponds on a l( that is this ) walking near the door of the center .I felt like my pulse (beats is more common ) of my heart stop and I couldn’t breathe ,too.It was so so diffecult on
(to) me,and my teachres and my friends ,too.After five minutes of crying I went to the center ,and I saw alot of chilren some of them have physical disbility ,others have mentally disabled (disability) ,and others have both of disabilities.It was so hard on us.You know (informal) there personalities is( are) amazing,wonderful,and incurdable.
When I was there I met a handsome boy; his name is Turkey .He was at(about) 9 years old .He tuch my heart with his big mind .I played with him so much ( u may say a lot , bt i'm not sure ),and I cryed when he spelled my name Angham waaaaw .It was incrudable feelings especailly that my name is tuff on (hard for ) the children to say (pronounc) it .It is wonderful that you to affected on
someone
.
Really when we saw those children, we felt the happiness in our heart after crying at the bebinning ,and we appreciate the blessings that Allah give ( gives or gave ) it to us so much .
This was an amazing visiting .It teachs me that if someone feels like dosen’t have a goel in life, he may go to any center of specail needs ,and you( he )will see things that make you( him) apprecaite your( his) life more than ever .

please CO dear correct my mistakes
wonderfullllllllllllllllllllll MashaAllah

Good luck

any Q ask

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة رغد محمد مشاهدة المشاركة
Thank you so much dear
نقرتين لعرض الصورة في صفحة مستقلةنقرتين لعرض الصورة في صفحة مستقلة
I have an idea
What about put a picture here in this page and descrip it ???
Do you like it ???
Because there is not any acticity here
Please give me your opinion
i love it

yea u have to do that
amazing idea


المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة عيون عليا مشاهدة المشاركة
In fact, I cannot correct your essay because I am still trying to be good in the writing, but in my opinion, you have a few mistakes in the spelling.I will let the correcting to our sweety teacher co .


Do not worry your writing is wonderful


Best wishes
may Allah blessu and reward u my dear friend for ur sweet tounge

 

توقيع Conscientious  

 


لا إله إلا أنت سبحانك إني كنت من الظالمين أستغفر الله وأتوب اليه

إدعوووووووووولي بالشفاء العااااااااااااااااااااجل

اللهم إغفر وارحم والد نور العمر نقرتين لعرض الصورة في صفحة مستقلة

قالوا: سنقطع رجلك. قلت: كَلَّا
قالوا: سينتشر المرض. قلت: إِنَّ مَعِيَ رَبِّي سَيَهْدِينِ

قال الله - تعالى -: " يا أيها الذين آمنوا اتقوا الله ولتنظر نفس ما قدمت لغدٍ واتقوا الله إن الله خبير بما تعملون"
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