محتاج احد يصحح لي الـ Essay

[رغد محمد]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة الفتى طيب إختي إلهام , اتمنى تكوني معاي حبة حبة عشان اركز بالبداية .. أنا ناوي اكتب موضوع عن ( غرق جدة ) بس والله ماني عارف كيف اركز على كيف راح يكون ترتيب الأحداث اللي راح اكتبها بالنسبة للمقال ؟ لأن اللي صححو لي قبل افادوني بأن مقالي غير مترابط من حيث بناء الجمل :(

?...Ok... What kind of essays you are going to write

?...I mean is it an Argumentative essay or Cause and Affect, or what

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[رغد محمد]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة الفتى بصراحة يا رغد حاولت اكتب مقال , كل ما اكتب سطرين ارجع امسح واحس ان ماله داعي .. قفلت معي ماني عارف كيف ابداء كتابة البراقراف ؟؟؟؟؟ المشكلة في البداية ؟؟؟؟ مادري ليش مالقيت بداية ترضيني ؟؟؟؟؟؟

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Hello brother

It's ok, always the beginning is hard, but then you can do it easily.

Ok, look

Change your subject and make it simple and talk about Smoking, ok?

So, your subject is Smoking

now, when you want to start writing, you have to write all your ideas in a paper about smoking like advantages, disadvantages, the reasons of smoking, etc and then you chose your best ideas.

:You can organize your ideas by two ways

Outlining or drawing

See my Attachments that I took it from this forum, and you will understand how to start writing and if there is any Q say it don't be shy brother

I'm waiting your second essay

Try to write it in 2 hours

?...OK

...May Allah protect you

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[MAX]

أسأل العظيم ان يوفقكم جميعا ويرضى عليكم
والله انا مبسوط من هذا التعاون الكبير ونحن بمثابة الاخوان في هذا الصرح العظيم
والله يشفى اخونا conscientious
ويمن عليه بالصحه والعافيه

[الفتى]

Raghad
thank u so much for helping me
I promise you that if I became a very famous writer and they made with me T.V interview, I will not say that I became famous because of Raghad

loooool

[إلهام]

sorry for the delay , but did u write any thing ^_^a
and like what Raghad said , u have to know what kind of essays u will write and pay more attention to such important point

GOOD LUCK

[الفتى]

Raghad suggested me to write an argumentative essay of "smoking in public places"

But I think that I will write another topic with same kind of essay.

Thank you so much Ahlam

[رغد محمد]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة الفتى Raghad thank u so much for helping me I promise you that if I became a very famous writer and they made with me T.V interview, I will not say that I became famous because of Raghad loooool

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....You are welcome brother

hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

Of course, you didn't become a famous because of me

I didn't do anything deserve to remember, and don't worry coz I will be the second guest in the same program

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Thank you brother

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المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة الفتى Raghad suggested me to write an argumentative essay of "smoking in public places" But I think that I will write another topic with same kind of essay Thank you so much Ahlam

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة الفتى

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...Ok

??...Where is your essay

I'm waiting brother, you don't have much time to write

Have a nice writing

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[atifmutlaq]

هذا المقال صغير جدا على كلام الدكتور طارق الياس
بالتوفيق

[محمدالعزيزي]

سيول جده بتجي ف الاختبار واللا فيه غيرها ؟دكتور الماده حدد بعض الصفحات هي اللي عليها الاختبار؟وبعدين كيف طريقة الاختبار ؟ارجوا الافاده جزاكم الله خير؟

[الفتى]

^^^


Ok, how about this one

Jeddah Floods

zzzzz Before one year ago, Jeddah were flooding. Also, three months ago it is flooding again!.
In addition, there are many houses, buildings and cars were destroyed because of floods. So, there are several reasons of Jeddah floods.

zzzzz First reason, climate change, we all know that the rains became heavy if we compared with previous years. At the same time, there was no flooding earlier in Jeddah because of rains in the way back history. Finally, climate change one of the main causes of the flood.

zzzzz Second, bad of discharge rains on Jeddah streets makes the flood more dangerous. Moreover, more than one hundreds peoples drowned in their cars and all these because of bad discharge. For this reason, those how cause of all the problems and floods must be punished.

zzzzz Another reason, careless of sit streets especially those in south of Jeddah. For example, the south street of King Abdul-Aziz University became like a river when it is rains heavily. However, there are promises not to repeat these floods.

zzzzz At the end, we look forward to what happened will fit many of errors in government departments. Above all, the dangers of floods.



I hope it's better than previous essay Raghad