محتاج احد يصحح لي الـ Essay

[الفتى]

Raghad suggested me to write an argumentative essay of "smoking in public places"

But I think that I will write another topic with same kind of essay.

Thank you so much Ahlam

[atifmutlaq]

هذا المقال صغير جدا على كلام الدكتور طارق الياس
بالتوفيق

[محمدالعزيزي]

سيول جده بتجي ف الاختبار واللا فيه غيرها ؟دكتور الماده حدد بعض الصفحات هي اللي عليها الاختبار؟وبعدين كيف طريقة الاختبار ؟ارجوا الافاده جزاكم الله خير؟

[رغد محمد]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة الفتى Raghad thank u so much for helping me I promise you that if I became a very famous writer and they made with me T.V interview, I will not say that I became famous because of Raghad loooool

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....You are welcome brother

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Of course, you didn't become a famous because of me

I didn't do anything deserve to remember, and don't worry coz I will be the second guest in the same program

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Thank you brother

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المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة الفتى Raghad suggested me to write an argumentative essay of "smoking in public places" But I think that I will write another topic with same kind of essay Thank you so much Ahlam

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة الفتى

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...Ok

??...Where is your essay

I'm waiting brother, you don't have much time to write

Have a nice writing

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[الفتى]

^^^


Ok, how about this one

Jeddah Floods

zzzzz Before one year ago, Jeddah were flooding. Also, three months ago it is flooding again!.
In addition, there are many houses, buildings and cars were destroyed because of floods. So, there are several reasons of Jeddah floods.

zzzzz First reason, climate change, we all know that the rains became heavy if we compared with previous years. At the same time, there was no flooding earlier in Jeddah because of rains in the way back history. Finally, climate change one of the main causes of the flood.

zzzzz Second, bad of discharge rains on Jeddah streets makes the flood more dangerous. Moreover, more than one hundreds peoples drowned in their cars and all these because of bad discharge. For this reason, those how cause of all the problems and floods must be punished.

zzzzz Another reason, careless of sit streets especially those in south of Jeddah. For example, the south street of King Abdul-Aziz University became like a river when it is rains heavily. However, there are promises not to repeat these floods.

zzzzz At the end, we look forward to what happened will fit many of errors in government departments. Above all, the dangers of floods.



I hope it's better than previous essay Raghad

[الفتى]

بصراحة مدة الأختبار قصيرة مرررة "ساعتين" المفروض يومين :(

ملاحظة : أسف لأني كتبت finally في البودي , لما نزلت الموضوع وبديت اقراء فيه وجاني شعور بالبراود
فجئة تغيرت ملامح وجهي وحسيت اني خبصت بإضافة الفينالي داخل البودي :(

[رغد محمد]

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~...Welcome brother

Your essay is beauitful. I like it and I correct it for you

?...I want you to know when we use a comma because it's your big problem, ok

So, look to this link. It's aan mazing link. It well help you to know how to use it, and there is Quizes ,too

You will like it Allah willing

Look!! I want you today to write another essay but in two hours no more, can you do it ? I believe you can

So, try to write another essay but with a different subject

Just do it don't think if it's hard on you just do it and commit time vey well

I want you to know some thing

I'm not a teacher at all. I'm just a student just like you. So, I want you to forget me if you saw any mistake from me or if I buther you in any way that I didn't mean it

I'm sorry brother

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At the end, I hope you learned any thing good from me even a little bit

Any more Qs you can ask

See you soon

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Raghad Mohammed

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[رغد محمد]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة الفتى بصراحة مدة الأختبار قصيرة مرررة "ساعتين" المفروض يومين :( ملاحظة : أسف لأني كتبت finally في البودي , لما نزلت الموضوع وبديت اقراء فيه وجاني شعور بالبراود فجئة تغيرت ملامح وجهي وحسيت اني خبصت بإضافة الفينالي داخل البودي :(

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Two days !!!! Why ? Are you going to write your life's story? Please don't think about it like it's something you have to do

Just do it like you love it, ok ?

Have a nice Friday

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[الفتى]

Hello sis, thank u so much for correction my essay

i just came, and i will write another essay with different topic


احس ما ينفع اشكرك بالانجليزي , الله يجزاك خير ويوفقك ويرزقك من حيث لا تحتسبين .

[رغد محمد]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة الفتى Hello sis, thank u so much for correction my essay i just came, and i will write another essay with different topic احس ما ينفع اشكرك بالانجليزي , الله يجزاك خير ويوفقك ويرزقك من حيث لا تحتسبين .

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Hello to you too, I'm soOo happy that you did'nt give up from my correction

This is something very goOoOod when you want learn anything

You don't have to thank me

Just pray for me and my parents if you remember me

Look to this link is very good

http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/commas.htm

May Allah help to take the Ful Mark

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