I want your advice in my essay.

[بر الأمان]

Children and Watching Television

No one can deny how television has a huge influence in children. Nowadays every home has at least one television. Children are affected to television by their nature so they like to sit and watch it for many hours without feeling bored. Doing that without adult monitoring is harmful. Iteffects on how children behave, what they prefer, and more of that their knowledge what is it.


First of all, letting children set in front of television for along hour every day impact in their personality. The result of last research in this issue show that most of the children who sit for a long time watching television become lonely and unsocial. They want to spend time in their special world with their beloved character or hero. They see anything other that is boring and waste of joy. They think it is the best thing to do like the hero even if it is not right or not suitable to them.


In addition, television programmes or cartons especially which they are for children always have essential hero or character. That hero is what children want to be like, do as he does and want to have everything belong to this hero. Maybe they fight each other over the character because everyone thinks his hero is the best and no one like him. Many children may try to do or act like hero they love or do dangerous things which they see in their cartons. Some time there are many of violence scenes in it and it is not suitable to children to watch so parents must be careful on what their children watch.


Finally, some programmes are good and we cannot deny that. It may be useful to children to watch and learn especially if it is educational one. Speaking about animals or things that in our environment children need to know details about it. However, these programmes are not show every time and they are few. We cannot depend on this fact to let our children sit for a long time by saying they are learning.

To conclude what I say, it should be the parents who have to be restrict and make the time their children spend in watching television less. They must know how television influence in their children and the impact will be for all their life. They have to do other activity which must be joyful and interesting to let children spend less time on television.

[المحزوون]

هذا برقراف وليس ايسي

الايسي ينقسم الى ثلاث اقسام

مقدمة

فكرة رئيسية

خاتمة

راجعي الكتاب لتعرفي الفرق بينها

والله يوفقك

[بر الأمان]

اخي الكريم راجع ما كتبت مرة اخري لتجد انه منقسم الي مقدمة و 3 افكار مؤيدية و داعمة لها ثم النهاية و كل منها عبارة عن فقرة من 3 جمل او اكثر .

[المحزوون]

انا اقصد انك لازم تتركين بين كل قسم واخر فراغ يعني سطر على الاقل ولا تشبكين الاقسام في بعض والا اعتبرت في الاختبار براقراف يعني تكتبين المقدمة واذا انتهيتي تتركين سطر وتبدأين بمسافة مايقارب خمسة احرف قبل البدء بالقسم الاخر وبحرف كابيتال وهكذا

وفي المرفقات عدة نماذج لكتابة ايسي


موفقة اختي ..

[بر الأمان]

اخي الفاضل شكرا لردك و مشاركتك ... انا اعرف هذه الامور و انها اساسية و لكن عندما قمت بتنسيق الايسي في المشاركة اختفت تنسيقاتي التي كنت قد قمت بها و لكن ما قلته انا اعرفه و افهمه و لعلك تعيد النظر الان لاني صلت بين كل برقراف و اخر بسطر و اصبح واضحا اين الكابيتال و لكن ام استطع ان اوضح المسافة المتروكة في بداية كل فقرة ليكتمل التنسيق ...

[المحزوون]

كان الهدف من ردي اني اخدمك والله وانا ارد على الي مكتوب في الموضوع ولا ادري انك كنتي قد نسقتي واختفت التنسيقات ولا يعلم الغيب الا رب العالمين سبحانه

وحنا كلنا في هالمنتدى يد وحده نعين ونعاون .

يالله .. اهم شي انك تعرفين اقسام الايسي

هههههه


موفقه اخيتي

[ابو فهد*]

I think this a great job and amazing in the same time to see such that essay written by a beginner student

NOTE:There are some grammatical mistakes which should be considered in the future. Any how, they don't affect your English writing

I hope you all have a great success

[sultan shammar]

ماشاء الله عليك


صدقيني ماينخاف عليك اذا انتي من كتب الايسي

[Mero ab]

i think you put random commas
try to connect the sentences more ..
great job amazing essay :D ..

[ranas]

الاسي واااااضح انو اسي مو براقراف وانا شايفه ماشاء الله فكرتك أو بلاصح افكارك مرررره حلوه بس يبغال شويه ترتيب وغير كذا كانى شفت كذا كلمه مكرره والتكرار عير مرغوب فيه موفقه أختي ربي يوفقك يارب