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السلآم عليكم ورحمة الله وبركآته ..

مرة كنت طفشآنه ومتضآيقة وكتبت دا الكلآم .. مع إنو إنجليزيتي مو مرة وآكيد حتشوفو دا الشئ لمآ تقرأو وتضحكو عليه
بليز ابغآكم تشوفو لي كيف الأسلوب والقرآمرز صححو لي يعني .. السبيلنق مو مشكلة آهم شي ترتيب الجملة وكدا .. يا رب تكونو فهمتو عليا ,, ومرة شكرآ ..

In our life, we most see alot of poor people, maybe we said oh this is sadden thing, but why we dont offer anything to him.
why we dont said any kind words, why we dont set with him.
there is one answer I can say it to you!!
because we are poor.. yes poor.. we are without feeling, without mercy, of cours we are poor..!
at the end just I want to ask you: imagine if you in this situation, what can you do..?

[دعاني الشوق]

حياك الله أختي أنا كذا
ما شاء الله بداية جيدة فيه شوية أخطاء سبيلنق وقراميتكل ولكن لابأس
الله يوفقك والكتابة تساعدك بعد مذاكرة القواعد

[المحزوون]

Use them instead of him

but generally, well done

[ابو فهد*]

In our life, we most see alot of poor people, maybe we said oh this is sadden thing, but why we dont offer anything to him. why we dont said any kind words, why we dont set with him. there is one answer I can say it to you!! because we are poor.. yes poor.. we are without feeling, without mercy, of cours we are poor..! at the end just I want to ask you: imagine if you in this situation, what can you do..?

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some time it could be incredible to see like this writing written by a new student

Please, accept my remark

you should write in one time for example present, past, etc...in this essay you have to use present time
you should use punctuation mark instead of comma in some places and use of plural pronoun
your subject is very emotional ammmm

Keep on & write as possible as you can

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[عاشق النون]

In our life, we most see ( see ) alot of poor people, maybe we said oh this is sadden thing, but why we dont offer anything to him.
(them ( why we dont said ( say ) any kind words, why we dont set with him.
there is one answer I can say it to you!!
because we are poor.. yes poor.. we are without feeling, without mercy, of cours we are poor..!
at the end just I want to ask you: imagine if you ( are ) in this situation, what can ( will ) you do..?




very very good

keepup

[saadoony]

In our life, we must (should) see a lot of poor people, maybe we said oh this is sadden thing, but why we don't offer anything to him (for them).
why we don't said any kind words, why we don't set with him (them).
there is one answer I can say it to you!!
because we are poor.. yes poor.. we are without feeling, without mercy, of course we are poor..!
at the end just I want to ask you: imagine if you in this situation, what can (would) you do..?

[Learner1]

It's really excellent as a beginner. With more practice, I guarantee you an amazing writing skill.

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In our life, we see a lot of poor people, maybe we say oh this is a sad thing; but why we dont offer them anything..
Why we dont say any kind words or sit with them.
There is one answer I can say to you.
Because we are poor, yes poor, we are without feeling, without mercy, yes we are poor.
At the end I just want to ask you, imagine if you were in this situation, what could you do ?

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Good luck & Keep up the good job