my first essay , need your opinion

[Mero ab]

اول ايساي ليا احس اني مخبصه .. اعطوني رايكم

How To Be Successful Student

Education is so important . And being successful when you are younger means you have a bright future ahead you and everyone want to move forward and improve m becoming something bigger . To be successful student is stepping stone to become successful adult you have to work hard for it and earn it by studying and practicing .

First , listen to the teacher carefully and write notes for things he\she mention and if you have question just ask your teacher don’t be shy to ask , it is better to learn from your mistake than being mistaken your whole life remember it's not going to improve your grads only but your knowledge as well .

The second thing , studying at home in every free time you had and you should have time on the week practice for your examination and don’t let anything distract you like video games or watching movies .

The last thing , you should have a good company at school so they can help you and support each other in studying and don’t distract you with other things such as going to hangout and instead they should concierge you to be better student and person even teach you new things you didn't understand or couldn't do by your own .

The aim of education system is teach you facts and figures and you have to be good at it if you looking for a better future and mostly improve what is best on you and work on it . Learning new skills at school grow you're knowledge it's not only words on books and facts its will teach you more than that , moving forward .

[Mero ab]

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هذا ليس essay
من الممكن ان يكون introduction
أختي
حاولي تعرفي خطوات الـ essay اولاً .. ثم بعد ذلك اكتبي
وتذكري دائماً :
وجود الثيسيس استيتمنت .. والمين ايديا في الانترودكشن

على حسب معلوماتي هذا الايسي خاطئ

اتمنى لك التوفيق

[Mero ab]

The intro is ...

1.Hook
2.connecting info
three sentance
3.thesis statment
with details


And its not only what was written above
the main idea .. hardwork, Studying , practicing , improve

correct me if im wrong

[English boy]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Mero ab اول ايساي ليا احس اني مخبصه .. اعطوني رايكم How To Be Successful Student Education is so important . And being successful when you are younger means you have a bright future ahead you and everyone want to move forward and improve m becoming something bigger . To be successful student is stepping stone to become successful adult you have to work hard for it and earn it by studying and practicing . First , listen to the teacher carefully and write notes for things he\she mention and if you have question just ask your teacher don’t be shy to ask , it is better to learn from your mistake than being mistaken your whole life remember it's not going to improve your grads only but your knowledge as well . The second thing , studying at home in every free time you had and you should have time on the week practice for your examination and don’t let anything distract you like video games or watching movies . The last thing , you should have a good company at school so they can help you and support each other in studying and don’t distract you with other things such as going to hangout and instead they should concierge you to be better student and person even teach you new things you didn't understand or couldn't do by your own . The aim of education system is teach you facts and figures and you have to be good at it if you looking for a better future and mostly improve what is best on you and work on it . Learning new skills at school grow you're knowledge it's not only words on books and facts its will teach you more than that , moving forward .

ur essay has been perfectly done! your gramar is alright
well done! and don't pay any attention to these comments above! I guarantee that your English is much better than those who have crticized on urs!! Keep on going
All the best

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خلي بــالك .. الإختصــارات ممنوعة كتابتها في الـ essay مثل

it's --- don't وما إلى ذلك ...

[Mero ab]

English Boy

Thaanks for the heads up :)

خلي بــالك .. الإختصــارات ممنوعة كتابتها في الـ essay مثل it's --- don't وما إلى ذلك ...

نسيييييت مرا ما جا عباااالي ... -_-"
تشكر على التنبييه ,

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