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Smoking

There are many bad habits in our society . All of us agree that smoking one of these habits because we are see effect it on smokers and society . I will explain effect it on our health and our economic .
Smoking effects on our health because it causes cancer and lung disease . Many smoker suffer from cancer , where research has proven that smoking causes cancer , which in turn lead to death. Besides the doctors say that most of patients who visit them are smokers . Therefore, I would advise smokers to quit smoking .
Smoking effects on our economic because smokers spend a lot of money to get cigarettes and the cigarette companies raise prices . Economic reports indicate that the smoker spends about 25 percent of his income for smoking . In addition , cigarette companies raise prices . A pack of cigarette was sold 1 dollars , now sells 3 dollars .
In conclusion , smoking is bad habit effects on us.

[English boy]

Smoking
There are many bad habits in our society . Most of us agree that smoking is one of these habits because we can see the effect of it on smokers and society. I will explain some of these effects that harm our health, economic and ofcourse the society.


Smoking effects on our health due to that fact that causes cancer and dangerous lung diseases. Many smokers suffer from cancer, where researches have proven that the main reason of cancer is smoking, which truly lead to certain death. That based on doctors who ensured that most of patients who visited them are smokers .

Therefore, I would advise smokers to quit smoking .
Smoking effects on our economic because smokers spend a lot of money to get cigarettes and its companies raise prices. Economic reports indicate that the smoker spends about 25 percent of his income on smoking . In addition, cigarette companies raise prices. A pack of cigarette has been sold with only 1 dollar, but recently it is been priced 3 dollars.

In conclusion , smoking is bad habit and it badly effects on us.

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your plan was okay as u've mentioned several points.. Economic, Health, Socity.. and u stuck with it! that was great shapping.. keep on going .. well done

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Thank you English boy....