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~...Hiiii darling MaloOokah
hi raghoody happy to see your comment about my essay
first of all thnx for your correction i'm very proud to be corrected by such a friend as you.
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It's my honor to correct your essay dear. You don't know how important that is to me honey
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and as belong to the spaces , i admit that i have a big problem with this thing because i mostly forget to leave any space or to put a comma, which is not good for my condition because i write long sentences and with out commas they become like a run-sentences .
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Yes, I notice that, but you have to practice more darling. It's not that hard. All what you have to do is to know where is the place that you can put a Comma or period. Masha'allah I notice that when you write a sentence, you write it very long. It is good thing, but you must put a comma or semicolon in you sentence to help the reader understand you honey
?...Do you understand my dear
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what is the thing that u dn't understand ? i'm trying to convince the reader with this sentence ,because after u mention the opposite view of the argument u should to write some words or some kind of sentence to go back to your point and your view of the argument ,thats why i put this sentence in between .
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...I see you point
!!...Ok.. Look
Your sentence is
While this saying have some merit on surface, however when children spend more than four hours daily on television
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You wrote however and when together. How can you put it together ...?? I don't think that we can join them together ?
Coz I felt this sentence is too complecated to understand
You may say :
While this saying have some merit on surface, .....etc you point
But you can't say however when togeter coz however need a comma after it even when need a comma after you complete the sentence
hhhhhhhhhhhh<< I feel like I make ffel like this
I mean your sentence will be like this :
While this saying have some merit on surface, however, when children spend more than four hours daily on television,.....etc
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has lots os commas and non finished thoughts
??...Get it
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thats it . thank u for your appreciative effort and i liked your notes ,looks like i'm gonna sent my persuasive essay in the next time hhhhh see ya dear .
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Send whatever you want dear, the important thing is learning honey. So, send all you essays, and I will send main to have a party of essays
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~...I'm not joking dear, send yours. I'm waiting
This is my Comparison essay tell me your points about it
See ya darling
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