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قديم 05-07-2011, 02:38 PM   #4

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تاريخ التسجيل: Jan 2009
كلية: كلية الآداب والعلوم الانسانية
التخصص: English
نوع الدراسة: متخرج - انتساب
المستوى: متخرج
البلد: منطقة الباحة
الجنس: ذكر
المشاركات: 92
Skaau.com (7) رد: ممكن تصححو لي :$

In our life, we most see alot of poor people, maybe we said oh this is sadden thing, but why we dont offer anything to him.
why we dont said any kind words, why we dont set with him.
there is one answer I can say it to you!!
because we are poor.. yes poor.. we are without feeling, without mercy, of cours we are poor..!
at the end just I want to ask you: imagine if you in this situation, what can you do..?

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some time it could be incredible to see like this writing written by a new student

Please, accept my remark

you should write in one time for example present, past, etc...in this essay you have to use present time
you should use punctuation mark instead of comma in some places and use of plural pronoun
your subject is very emotional ammmm

Keep on & write as possible as you can
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