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hi for you both master abu fahad and my lovely frined raghad

i just want to share my notes with you guys . as belong to your essay raghad i could say in my humble opinion that your writing in this cause and effect essay is much better than the first one you wrote .because your sentences structure is very good and clear .

second thing i correct your essay like this :

the orange words i corrected them for you

the green words are words that i added

and there is just one blue word that i want to ask you about

which is : him/her
i mean is it right to write such a thing in the essay don't we have to be more specific in our writing and write instead just "him" for example ?

i hope to answer me about that point >hope you all the good in the world for you raghad and abu fahad.